site critique

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I've been working on my site, and would like
to know if it has come up to standards, and
what I can do to make it more informative,
inviting, and of course make more sales.
Thankyou.

http://equaljob.com
Professional Resume Crafting
 
Ok, for starters:
( and please take this as "constructive" criticism )

Home page:
We write powerful career
statements that express
your achievements and
skills dramatically and
grabs attention in seconds

needs to be something like:

We write powerful career
statements, that express
your achievements and
skills dramatically and
grab attention in seconds

We've been helping people jumpstart there careers for 25 years
needs to be:
We've been helping people jumpstart their careers for 25 years

If your not happy we're not happy
needs to be either:
If you're not happy we're not happy
or
If you are not happy we are not happy

At the very bottom of the page.
Change the copyright date at the bottom of the page. It is now 2006.
Shouldn't it be centered??

Also, this:
&
©Site Design
is way over on the right all by itself.

and there is a blue bar on the left below the copyright and email info.

You may want to check your entire site for grammatical errors.
If you want folks to believe you create "Awesome" resumes, you need to make
sure your site is grammatically correct.

Last but not least, your "Discuss with friends" image is hot linked from
another site instead of being on your server.
It also has a tag that's not compatible with some browsers.
<image should be <img


hth

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Steve Easton
Microsoft MVP FrontPage
95isalive
This site is best viewed............
........................with a computer
 
ahem...
I'm Bob, and I'm a commaholic.

I love sticking those little buggers into a sentence as much as possible.
But, I don't think a comma belongs where you have indicated.
needs to be something like:

We write powerful career
statements, that express
your achievements and
skills dramatically and
grab attention in seconds
Click to expand...

Bob Lehmann
Commas - one is too many, but a thousand is not enough.
 
Hi Steve and Bob,
Thankyou both for the site critique I will polish up the site,
can you both try to help me with the "mysterious blue bar" at the bottom
left of my site, I know it is an extra "table" but for the life of me I have
tried everything to remove this blue bar, even tried removing it from the
code, but it just won't budge. Can you try and download the page
and see what you can do in removing this blue bar, extra table. I really
have tried everything, it is a stubborn blue bar. There is some extra
code in there that is causing it I think, or part of the "Recurring grey
border"
that you see at the left. That grey border is supposed to run down the left
side of the page, and I think the "grey border" think there is an extra
page so
it has added itself to what it believes is an extra page I think, maybe I
am wrong.
Thankyou, su
 
A comma represents a short pause in a sentence, but I agree, the comma
doesn't seem to fit where it is or was suggested, since it is one flowing
sentence and doesn't need pauses (indicated by commas).

On the other hand, maybe the para in the OP's site can be rewritten as
below, using a semi-colon rather than a comma, or even a full stop.

"We write powerful career statements; they express your achievements and
skills dramatically, and grab attention in seconds."
 
LOL
I looked at that sentence many times, and rewrote it more than once.
My intention was to separate the "We write" from what it attempts to do, and
as Andrew suggested even considered using a semi colon.

;-)


fwiw, did you ever read Andy Rooney's ( from 60 minutes ) little essay on
punctuation??


--
Steve Easton
Microsoft MVP FrontPage
95isalive
This site is best viewed............
........................with a computer
 
The index page has resume' dunno what the ' is for, maybe: résumé (in North
American English; also sometimes spelled resumé or resume)

The Services page has a image that doesn't exist.

Some body text is serif, some is sans-serif stick to one style..also I think
some font sizes are different as well.

The banner image on About Us is stretched and looks a little googy.

Minor stuff.


| Ok, for starters:
| ( and please take this as "constructive" criticism )
|
| Home page:
| We write powerful career
| statements that express
| your achievements and
| skills dramatically and
| grabs attention in seconds
|
| needs to be something like:
|
| We write powerful career
| statements, that express
| your achievements and
| skills dramatically and
| grab attention in seconds
|
| We've been helping people jumpstart there careers for 25 years
| needs to be:
| We've been helping people jumpstart their careers for 25 years
|
| If your not happy we're not happy
| needs to be either:
| If you're not happy we're not happy
| or
| If you are not happy we are not happy
|
| At the very bottom of the page.
| Change the copyright date at the bottom of the page. It is now 2006.
| Shouldn't it be centered??
|
| Also, this:
| &
| ©Site Design
| is way over on the right all by itself.
|
| and there is a blue bar on the left below the copyright and email info.
|
| You may want to check your entire site for grammatical errors.
| If you want folks to believe you create "Awesome" resumes, you need to
make
| sure your site is grammatically correct.
|
| Last but not least, your "Discuss with friends" image is hot linked from
| another site instead of being on your server.
| It also has a tag that's not compatible with some browsers.
| <image should be <img
|
|
| hth
|
| --
| Steve Easton
| Microsoft MVP FrontPage
| 95isalive
| This site is best viewed............
| .......................with a computer
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
| | > I've been working on my site, and would like
| > to know if it has come up to standards, and
| > what I can do to make it more informative,
| > inviting, and of course make more sales.
| > Thankyou.
| >
| > http://equaljob.com
| > Professional Resume Crafting
|
|
 
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